petem
Well-Known Member
Comments below!
Pete we are polishing a turd here. Almost every sentence of the RYA doc is awful. I don't think any of us have the will to re-draft the whole thing!
You have to start at 6.1.
Why is the “if” condition included? Presumably because the triggering of this clause may never happen (e.g. the owners may simply agree to collectively sell the boat).
Do you think the (important) word “reasonable” qualifies just “cause”, or “desire” as well? I agree, they're pointless words so I will amend accordingly.
What precise function does the word “individual” do? I thought about this and I read it that each partner needs to be separately notified.
In 6.2
The “determining Party” expression is horrible and clumsy. Would "exiting Party" be an improvement?
The second sentence imposes an obligation. By when, on what terms, and what if he doesn’t? Sorry, I don't know how to fix that.
There is danger of dispute as to whether the important “do not wish” trigger is pulled so that should be by notice in writing. Good point, will add this.
And anyway this should not be drafted as a matter of mere wishing but one of actually getting chequebook out and buying. Understood, will try and address this.
I hate the “take on” expression but in any case it needs to involve D buying the share and executing a deed of adherence (in agreed form) to the syndicate agreement. When I read "take on" I didn't like it but left it in as the exiting party may just give the share (as opposed to selling it). But this is inconsistent with the other clauses so I will amend to "sell". Agree with your second point and will update accordingly.
And so on. I have to stop there because as noted above this is a turd/Mr Sheen situation. Bjb was right. You might think I’m being pedantic but these are divorce not marriage clauses. It's very difficult for me, with very limited drafting skills, to start from scratch.